Saturday, August 27, 2016

Ch 13 Preview and Update

So I am about 75% done with Chapter 14, and I am really pleased with it.  It is looking to be about 12,000 words, with the bulk of it being one massive sex scene that caps the chapter.  Although I am really excited about it, I will say that if you haven't liked the way Elfin Descent has been going so far, you probably won't like this chapter either.  On the other hand, if you do like how Elfin Descent is going, you're going to like this chapter a lot!

That being said, here is a quick preview from Chapter 13:

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“Lyriena, welcome.”  The Prince grinned widely as he greeted the princess.  His tongue flicked over his tusks as he leered at the royal elf.  “We’ve been waiting for you.  Soleil, isn’t there something you wish to say to your Princess?”

Soleil’s jaw looked like it might shatter.  Her eyes shot daggers at Lyriena, but she nonetheless approached and dropped into a curtsey.  But instead of rising again, she lowered herself to the floor and began kissing the princess’ feet.  “Forgive me Your Highness.  You’re a Princess and I’m just a lowly whore; I should never have treated you so disrespectfully.”  Soleil ran her lips over the toe of Lyriena’s silk shoe, and then began dragging her tongue up and down the sides.  “Please forgive this lowly slut.  I was jealous of your beauty, your wealth, your stature, and the attention showed upon you by the Prince.  I’m willing to accept any punishment you deem proper.”

Of course she didn’t seem truly sorry, but Lyriena preferred it that way.  She didn’t want a contrite Soleil, she wanted a proud, arrogant Soleil to be humiliated.  She wanted to make the whore sorry and put her permanently in her place.  Seeing the servant kiss her foot filled her with a power she had never felt; not even when she was secure in her identity and position back in Deznessuian.  

It felt good, having this power.  It made her feel strong, and she relished it after feeling powerless for so long.  “You will be punished, whore; for touching your betters, for deigning to assert authority over me.”  She lifted her foot and began to press her shoe against Soleil’s face.  She rubbed the sole over the servant’s tongue and forced her to worship every inch of it.  She could already feel her pussy getting moist, and a shiver of excitement shot through her.  She was definitely going to enjoy this!
“I’ve had some ideas on that front, Lyriena.  Florette?”

Soleil’s sister approached the princess with a long wooden box.  She presented it to Lyriena, who then opened it.  Inside was a long, thick dildo fashioned in the shape of a horse’s cock.  Lyriena gasped at the sight of it.  It was huge!  It also appeared to be connected to a harness of leather straps.

“It’s molded off of Eastern Wind’s cock” Trogar said with a grin.  “I thought you might fuck Soleil with it, to assert your dominance over her.”

This was based on Eastern Wind’s penis? It is so long, so thick so powerful looking, she thought with wonder as she traced her fingers alongside it.  A smile crossed her lips as she imagined her big stallion mounting the insolent servant.  Maybe she’d be able to arrange that for real before this was all over!  For now though, the idea of ravishing her with her mount’s shaft made her smile.  “That is an excellent idea, Trogar!”  She gave Soleil a wicked grin.  “Strip off those clothes, slut.  A whore does not need them!”

A triumphant grin crossed Trogar’s face at Lyriena’s enthusiasm.  “That’s true, Lyriena; whores don’t need clothes.”

Soleil grimaced, but nonetheless unlaced her dress and peeled off her clothes, letting them fall to the floor and pool at her feet.  She trembled in apprehension at the thought of Lyriena’s revenge.  The harlot looked down at the massive sex toy and shuddered.  It was bigger than anything she had taken before, and she had taken many large shafts.  It was certainly bigger than any orc she ever had!
The naked elf’s twin circled behind Lyriena and began to unlace her dress.  “Let me help you, Princess.  These things can be a little difficult to figure out the first time.  But I’m sure you’ll get the hang of it!”

Lyriena shivered in excitement as her body was bared. Her pierced nipples stiffened as they became exposed to the two elfs and the Prince.  The tiny gold rings glistened in the light as her small bust heaved.  Each touch of Florette’s soft fingers on her hips as she applied the harness sent electric jolts of pleasure through her body.  Finally, Florette finished and the princess looked down at the thick, heavy sex toy jutting out lewdly from her body.  Is this what men felt like?  

Soft footfalls sounded in the room as she stepped towards Soleil.  She placed her hands on the elf’s shoulders and pushed her roughly to the floor.  She then shook her hips and slapped the horse-cock dildo across the servant’s face.  “Have you ever taken one of these before, Soleil?  I know you have fucked elfs and humans for money.  And you’ve fucked orcs for money.  But what about horses?  It seems like it would be the natural progression for you.  Well, if you have not before, you are going to now.”

26 comments:

  1. 'So I am about 75% done with Chapter 14, and I am really pleased with it. It is looking to be about 12,000 words'

    Oh dear, I have to check through 12,000 words for errors and typo's! :)

    Looking forward to the next chapter regardless.

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  2. You still owe me corrections for this chapter!

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    1. I was at a medieval faire for the past two days, but now that It's over I have time to do some edits... Well that, after my aching, mead-induced hangover is gone! ;)

      I've spotted like six or seven typos for Chapter 13 so far, anyway.

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  3. I find it hard to get excited about the upcoming chapters because Trogar is so incredibly boring and annoying to read. I'd rather just see more scenes with the princess at the brothel than read Torgar's pathetic but always effective because the plot demands it attempts at winning her to his side.

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    1. Well, You're in luck as most of ch 14 takes place in the brothel :)

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    2. That's a relief. Fingers crossed for Brahm being the one to take her virginity (and who knows, get her with child) as a final "fuck you" to Trogar.

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  4. Oh my, I think I'm going to like Chapter 14 then.

    12,000 words of fun await!

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  5. lyriena needs some serious fucking.. hurry up already... and make jeannette a goddess again pls... the only way humiliation works is if she gets more power and more success... so get with it quick and restore jeannette to being the most beautiful, flawless piece of cock-hungry fuckmeat on all mortal land...

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  6. why cant jeannette get a magical device that restores her 18 year old beauty and restores her tightness and hymen.. i dont like her loose and worn out.... this way she gets refreshed every morning and destroyed by nightfall... cuz seriously jeannette needs to be more fun to fuck

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    1. Sorry, I don't think this is going to happen...but if people want to see a younger, purer Jeanette get fucked I can focus the side stories on her younger years.

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  7. the dog/horse aint as fun as orc.. and humans need to be on top of social pyramid again for orc-human sex to be fun again... that was the reason jeannette series 1 was best.. pls try to see from this view... its not proper humiliation if u get raped by the species at the top of social pyramid. thats expected and hence boring... fucked by something that is low, base, servile and being overpowered by that is what works...

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    1. I do know what you're talking about...that's why the current and future stories are taking place in lands where humans rule.

      But for me, it's not just the woman getting fucked by an inferior creature...it is also in getting usurped by one. The orcs taking over is integtal.

      That being said, if I ever write the second series I've been thinking about, the social order will be reverted. Alas, that will be long after Jeanette's death.

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  8. Make Jeannette great again

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  9. Dear god... Trump has found the Porn...

    MAKE HUMANITY GREAT AGAIN!

    MAKE THE ORCS PAY FOR THE WALL!

    :P

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    1. lol good1... but Bernie for me though

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    2. sorry if i come across as overly critical but liked this series becuz of the storyline... and lyriena works for me just fine too... but its kinda like from the beginning of her storyline u straightaway know she's going to be enslaved... i loved chapter 11 twist for this very reason but the chapters in between kinda drew it out too long for me.... although i understand ur fascination with hits and misses... i kinda had that kink for a time too...

      but after all said i want stronger, more complex storylines that make the sex more powerful... thats what everybody wants... all i was saying is author did good job for jeannette series 1&2 to build that up but the hits and misses cudve been stronger if there were even more players involved somehow and world development of Zentara wasnt going well enough for me... u see im a huge GOT fan and hence kinda want people to be smart about their options and possibilities... i think u can relate to all this and understand my impatience... maybe ill shut up completely if there's less of a wait between chapters.... i guess that cud be it too... i cud finally be done with this and move on to something new....

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    3. -sorry if i come across as overly critical but liked this series becuz of the storyline-

      You didn't come off as overly critical, at least not to me anyway. Have no fears, dear fellow!

      -but after all said i want stronger, more complex storylines that make the sex more powerful.-

      Who doesn't want that!

      Of course, complex story-lines can be somewhat hard to do without having them turn into convoluted messes. Complex storylines plus smut... that sounds a little difficult to deliver.

      -world development of Zentara wasnt going well enough for me.-

      At some points, I get what you mean. I believe Orc Dominion's future stories in the universe will probably expand the story out further... or at least I am hoping so.

      As to GOT, well I've never really read the books, and am not much of a fan of GOT, mainly because the fighting choregraphy is so terrible! (In my opinion at least)


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    4. If you're looking for more of a Game of Thrones situation, you'll probably like Triumph. It is going to have 5 points of view and take place in Heste, Zentara, Thesta, and the Angrian March.

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    5. Well, I'm looking forward to that.

      I have the distinct feeling that there might be some 'brotherly' dynastic struggles going on later in the series, maybe ten/twenty years down the line. There's going to be a lot of royal children being born with a lot of ambition... it never end's out too well.

      But hey, maybe they find that southern continent before the shit starts to fly and they start fucking up the Centuar's, Minotaur's and Mincentti... or should that be 'fucking' the Centaur's, Minotaur's and Mincentti? ;P

      I also wonder who Princess Amelie is going to marry?

      And who the orcish princess who is interested in fighting is going to marry?

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  10. "On the other hand, if you do like how Elfin Descent is going, you're going to like this chapter a lot!"

    Judging by comments for the last few chapters and the reaction to the latest chapter I don't think ANYONE is happy with how the story is going.

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    1. Heh, it's not quite that bad. Probably around 50/50, though that is a big departure from the 95% approval of the previous stories.

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    2. I must second Orc Dominion on this.

      Having read chapter 14 (Benefits of being a grammar slave!), I can safely say that the upcoming chapter is a little less 'aggravating' than in the previous chapters. I won't tell you what happens, but it certainly has a different vibe and feel. I liked elements of the upcoming Chapter, and I feel that others might. Others definitely won't though.

      That said, I still want to kick Trogar in the dick, and Soleil... ARGGGHHH! I want to go downright 'medieval' on her fat ass! (I think this is a good thing, however... you definitely need characters to hate)

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  11. Ok, I'm pretty curios now. When will you upload it?

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    1. A week from Friday I think. Sooner if I finish 15 and it gets proofread.

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